Something rough, I’ve read it through once to make sure I didn’t typo… but otherwise, pretty raw.

I don’t want to edit this until I get some kind of feedback on it, I’m feeling very critical of myself at the moment, so I can’t trust my thoughts on this! What are your thoughts?

You’re swimming,
swimming through the depths
of my mind;

You’re swimming
swimming through the depths of my mind
its too soon
too soon, I know
I’m the fool you know
the fallen fool,
you’re swimming, swimming through my soul;

into the depths of my life
the depths of my heart
the darkest of alley ways
dark corners;

you’re etched into every new memory
a moment without you
and you’re swimming
swimming through my soul
and I can’t stop thinking
about you.